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Please take the time to read them, they say a lot about me!

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Love Critiques by tRiBaLmArKiNgSI love my watchers by tRiBaLmArKiNgS

Personal beliefs:
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About me:
Reading is gold. by PixieRiotSTAMP: Glasses by EmotikonzGenderfluid by Inkiedostare in my fridge stamp. by CitrusEcstasy---xAwkward by Fyi-SusVery Good Bad Example by ladieofficaldeep down by iLedSadist Stamp by Greetings-I-Am-SINTJ by RenaliasIf Zombies Chase Us by RuthlessDreamsGeek Stamp Series - Space by Ducksauce-splashGeek Stamp Series - Science by Ducksauce-splashGeek Stamp Series - Math by Ducksauce-splash

My interests:
DA Stamp - Math 01 by tppgraphics[Stamp] Science by CreepiestNoodle OMH -Stamp- by ParamourxLightsMudz Stamp by ThemoonrulznnyStamp_Cyborg Noodle by ShiVoodoonirvana stamp by maryduranMr Bean stamp by HappyStampHello, my name is.. by cfryantI Like Trains -stamp- by I-Am-The-LawrDarkness redness whiteness stamp by KristianTheTiragonStephen Fry by viruneeWhere is the lid? stamp by magical-braRDJ Kisses For Everyone Stamp by TwilightProwlerSH It's Fine Stamp by TwilightProwlerDancing Doctor Stamp by TwilightProwlerWaving Doctor Stamp by TwilightProwlerREAL Music Stamp by MabMeddowsMercuryMaths Stamp by RococokaraSTAR-TREK TAS Fan Stamp by JRWenzelSeverus Snape Stamp by OdogooStar Wars Stamp by ChimeraDragonfangImagination stamp by NamiYamiFawlty Towers by ShantellaEels Stamp by Playing-it-downMonty Python Logo Stamp by krunchiefrogMy Brain Hurts by TwilightKirby

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DA Stamp - Think 01 by tppgraphicsLe Moustache Stamp by Leafbreeze7I Kill My Characters by MysteriousBob777since when? by Numbuh-9I'll Kill You. by ValotoxinI like you, i'll.. by esoog-adnamaTakeover Stamp by JetProwerTheFoxFreaking Airport Stamp by chibi22If looks could kill stamp by quazoKeep Talking. by ValotoxinLive Forever by ValotoxinYou Want To Keep Breathing... by Foxxie-ChanDramatic Kitty Go Lookie by ImFeelingStampityUgly barnacle stamp by ARTic-WeatherWow You Really Suck Stamp by ladieofficalgas mask stamp by gyenes:thumb201379705:the golden rule by iLedwhere there's a will by iLedGood Morning by RuthlessDreamsan apple a day by iLedInterrupt by Fyi-SusMy Younger Self Stamp by invader-zim-14I know everything by postmortummamazing stamp by Shantella

Science!:
Physics Stamp by SSJMihoshiLet's Do Science by ririnyanLarge Hadron Collider Stamp by stampystampyI Support the String Theory by stampystampyEvolution Stamp by Kezzi-RoseUniverse Stamp by Kezzi-Roseanatomy stamp by boneworksStand Back Stamp by ladieofficalNo, it's not by xPine

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Photomanipulation is hard to do well to create a convincing effect, but you nailed it. It's immediately apparent that you didn't just m...

Kseniya by cocoaspen

Immediately what caught my eye seeing this drawing is your extremely advanced understanding of anatomy. Your sense of color, lighting, ...

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Hey, want a critique? Note me! But first, please refer to my rules and instructions:



In note:
:bulletyellow: Link to deviation(s).
:bulletyellow: Let me know the specific areas you'd like me to focus on. (Examples: "Is the dialogue realistic enough?" "Any grammatical mistakes?" or "Is there some way I can make this paragraph more fluid?") These will be very helpful!
:bulletyellow: Be sure to specify whether you would like harsh critique or gentle criticism.
:bulletyellow: I will respond to let you know I received the note and to clarify anything. I probably won't get to critiquing right away.

Things I WILL NOT critique:
-Fanfictions
-Animations
-W.I.P.s
(work in progress)
-Low quality images (where I cannot clearly see the piece)
-Cosplay
-Pornography, fetish, or pairings
(I decide whether or not it counts.)
-Derogatory work (Racist, sexist, homophobic, etc. or promotes/supports these themes. Again, I decide whether it counts.)
-Pieces so poorly done (no effort was put into it) that they cannot be considered finished work



You should also keep in mind...
:bulletgreen: I critique both premium and regular members.
:bulletgreen: All critiques are free, but I'd appreciate a thank you or llama!
:bulletgreen: If I turn your work down, check the above list of things I don't critique. It’s probably on there.
:bulletgreen: All critiques are based off personal experience/opinion. Keep in mind I don't know everything!
:bulletgreen: If you have questions regarding why I do not critique a certain type of work or whether or not your work falls within the criteria, please don't hesitate to :note: me!

Love Critiques by tRiBaLmArKiNgS
  1. How long have you been on DeviantArt?   3 years. 

  2. What does your username mean?    You know, Google Translate isn't as reliable as I thought it was. If any native Dutch speakers can give me a more accurate answer, that would be cool.

  3. Describe yourself in three words.    :icondwightschruteplz: "Hard-working. Alpha male. Jackhammer... merciless... insatiable..." -Dwight Schrute

  4. Are you left or right handed?    Righty.

  5. What was your first deviation?  This little number right here.  The Name's Pond. Amy Pond by bloedzuigerbloed

  6. What is your favourite type of art to create?    Sculpture.

  7. If you could instantly master a different art style, what would it be?    Impressionist painting.

  8. What was your first favourite?    "Summer Paradise" by priteeboy. Summer Paradise by priteeboy

  9. What type of art do you tend to favourite the most?    Digital art or photography. There's a lot of that stuff out there.

  10. Who is your all-time favourite deviant artist?    tracyjb. :)

  11. If you could meet anyone on DeviantArt in person, who would it be?    No idea. I'm not worthy of any of them. :worships2: 

  12. How has a fellow deviant impacted your life?    catlantic has talked to me almost every single day for three years. Don't know where I'd be without you.

  13. What are your preferred tools to create art?    Me own two hands! Awkward Turtle 

  14. What is the most inspirational place for you to create art?    There is really no inspirational place for me to work. Just wherever there's food.

  15. What is your favourite DeviantArt memory?    Hasn't happened yet.

10 Techniques to Writing a More Interesting Piece

Or: “How to Capture the Attention of Your Audience”


Hey, it's me, bloedzuigerbloed! Some of you may be familiar with my
"Characters: Using them, making them, voicing them" journals. While that (excessively long) journal covered many topics, it's time to add a bit more onto each of those by giving the important ones their own tutorial.



    Ever have that experience where you’ve finished a vignette or story you’re quite proud of, only to re-read it and find it rather… well… boring? Or find yourself with a great concept, but no clue how to make it sound readable? Do you zone out just re-reading your work and have difficulty capturing others’ attention as well? I’m sure you have. We all have. 

It's time to catch your readers' attention!


    I’ve come up with 10 ways that might help you avoid those oh-so-common instances of boredom; to keep the attention of your readers/audience and make your work just a bit more interesting.


If you want to pull readers in, try to…


1. Avoid the “glazed doughnut”


    At all costs. The “glazed doughnut” in this context is not the sugary toroid you might be imagining, but rather an area of text where the audience cannot pay attention and “glazes over.”

    Some instances of this: The author rambling on about minute details that have no effect on the plot, character development, background development, or themes. Or perhaps there are no paragraph breaks on the page and the reader is forced to mow through the whole page in one sitting.

    How to fix this: It’s easy to slip into this in your writing if you have the tendency to ramble during conversation, so every so often take a break from the story to read it out loud. Take a note of when you take on a monotone. Perhaps even ask someone to listen while you read and point out areas where they were getting bored or noticed a monotone in your speech, or request that they read it over and take note of when they started to skim and stop paying attention. Also, adding paragraph breaks makes it easier for readers to see the overall content of the page and pay attention more easily, as well as skip around if they choose to.



2. Stop repeating repeating yourself yourself yourself


    At least don’t do it too often. If you’ve already said it, it’s okay to say it again. After all, repetition is a common literary device for poetry, and often in prose the same themes resurface repeatedly. But directly referencing a subject any more than a few times can be eye-roll inducing (meaning alluding to it occasionally is fine). Your readers might want to shout, “Yes, the protagonist is tall! I already know! You’ve told me 4 times!” or “Why won’t this character shut up about their dead pet tortoise? She just finds every possible way to slip it into conversation!”

    After paragraphs upon paragraphs explaining and re-explaining the same thing, the readers will get annoyed. I know because I have, reading countless books that fail to be mindful of the repetition rule and bore me with pages of the same dribble. So, if while reading your piece you begin to notice the same recurring sentences and facts, be sure to pick and choose the places where you believe these are really necessary and omit the rest.

    How to fix this: Go through and toss out any excessive repetition. (Yes, I know it sounds tedious, but it's worth it.) And chances are, the reason you’re repeating yourself so often is because you want to stress the fact that your character is tall or an orphan or depressed. Instead of mentioning it tons of times, demonstrate it only a few times. Showing it helps get the message across to your viewers more easily than saying it, so you only need to put it in there once or twice. But if it’s still not working, keep in mind whether or not the fact is so imperative to get across to your viewers and so integral to the plot that you need to put it in there in the first place.


3. Never underestimate the practicality of a good thesaurus


    I highly suggest utilizing one. (I linked to an online thesaurus down at the bottom of the page.) But it’s painfully obvious when someone was writing a piece with an online thesaurus open in another tab and they had no idea what they were doing. As a general rule of thumb: don’t use any synonyms you aren’t familiar with. If you do, you might end up misusing one.



4. Vary your subjects & plots


    There’s nothing that draws in the attention of an adventurous reader like an entirely new topic. Try a never-done-before setting with unique characters participating in a plot ridden with unexpected twists and turns. If you want to really suck your readers in, don’t go for the predictable. Be random. (Story randomizer linked at the bottom of the page.)

    Who knows, you might choose a random combination of settings and character personalities that actually  produce a very promising piece of work that you can expand into a published piece. There are plenty of online generators that will combine a random series of plots and characters for you if you’re stuck trying to come up with something.

    This is actually a great exercise to do weekly or even daily. Find an online generator to choose random elements for your story (settings, names, personalities) and use it as a prompt. Write a short snippet about it. Or even a whole story, if you think you can. Just to get the juices flowing. This is useful when suffering from writer’s block as well.


5. Create a Reader Black Hole


    Nothing can escape its gravitational pull. NOTHING! No reader is safe! Make a good first impression by starting off with a big, fat, black hole that your readers simply can’t resist. Do some research if you have to about what catches human attention most. What do humans respond to quickly? What do you respond to quickly? Food? Nudity? Murder? Danger? Try to build off of what you find.

6. More interesting sentence structure


    The sentences we learn to write as little kids are simple, independent ones. “The black cat sat on the mat” is straightforward and simple, with no information other than there is a black cat positioned on top of a mat. To spice up the sentence, it’s important to add a dependent or independent clause the the beginning or end of most sentences.


Don't let your audience get bored!

    If you notice too many simple sentences together in one paragraph or page (or even throughout the whole story), try to modify them with clauses at the beginning or end. This will make it more tolerable for your audience (assuming you audience doesn’t consist of six year olds) to read.


7. Avoid sense neglect


    Sense neglect is when you don’t bother to give three or four out of the five senses a chance. Your descriptions mainly consist of what a character/narrator sees and/or hears, but very rarely mention taste, smell, or touch. You’d notice if you could suddenly not smell or feel anything, wouldn’t your readers notice too? Simulations are most effective when all or most of the senses are activated, so submerge your reader in the story by not neglecting your senses. Embrace them! And use them to your advantage.


8. Vary your names


    I know it sounds like it won’t help much, but it does actually deserve some thought. It’s easy to start skimming through a story instead of actually reading when all the names begin with the same letter, or have the same vowel sounds. If you think you could manage to do that without causing too much harm to come to your story, try it. Perhaps Toby, Tony, and Tracy will be more likely to suck readers into the story and help them absorb it if you make a few edits to their names.


9. Make the dialogue pop


    Nobody (at least nobody I know of) wants to sit and hear someone drone on and on about the same old subject without varying their word choice the tiniest bit. They'll get bored and want to put the book down.


It’s hard to pay attention to, and it gets boring really easily. So try to use attention-catching diction and sentence structure to cast out a little mini fishing rod and reel in a few book lovers. I for one know nothing catches my eye like interesting dialogue.


10. Don’t settle for mediocre


    Just don’t. And this isn’t just a tip for making your writing interesting, it applies to all things you’re interested in doing.
Cooking, research, painting, gymnastics, etc. Remember that if you managed to do it, you can most definitely manage to do it better. So why stop in the middle and say “Meh… it’s good enough”? Not to sound cliche here, but you won’t improve if you don’t push what you think you’re capable of. The most common reason why I find some of my work boring is that I didn’t try hard enough and stopped working because I felt lazy. I know that if I don’t put in my hardest work on a story, it doesn’t deserve half the attention I wanted it to get. It deserves exactly what I put into it. And it gets about that much, too.

There’s no reason why anyone should settle for mediocre and expect everything wonderful to come raining down around them. For some people, success comes quickly because they have connections with the right people, but the best thing you can be known for is what you worked hard on. Don’t stop in the middle. Keep going.





RELATED LINKS:
Online story outline/setting generator:
www.seventhsanctum.com/generat…
My “Abstract Vs Concrete” tutorial here on DA:
fav.me/d7vjnsl
Online thesaurus:
www.oxforddictionaries.com/us/…


Thank you to all who took the time to to read this. I hope it was helpful!


Keep writing.

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Some of my stuff:


Weary Wanderer by bloedzuigerbloedEmpress by bloedzuigerbloed cheap american corndo you remember
when we were little
and plastic-skinned
toting pails
like puppies
putting lollipop sticks
between our lips
and pretending
they were cigarettes
and that we were
refined adults set on
breaking our lungs
for society
the suburbs
and the
cheap american corn
i remember the nights
getting reliably colder
watching my digits
turn violet by lack of heat
and knowing how much
i still had to learn
running my purple fingers
under the faucet
until they flushed pink again
and
taking a drag on a
tootsie pop stick,
knowing how much
everyone else still had to learn too
Giant Deer by bloedzuigerbloed

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:pointr: Literature geek.
:pointr: Everything else geek.
:pointr: I will probably get your references.
:pointr: You will probably not get mine.
:pointr: World's leading expert on the structure of Hugh Laurie's face. (Not really.)
:pointr: Favourite band: They're still battling it out.
:pointr: Favourite colour: The colour of fear.
:pointr: Favourite food: Food.
:pointr: Favourite animal: Human.
:pointr: Favourite human: Not you.
:pointr: Overuses bulleted lists. You will hate me for it.







I can art sometimes maybe. I'm decent.



I DO:

:bulletred: Traditional drawings
:bulletred: Paintings in watercolor and acrylic
:bulletred: Polymer clay sculptures
:bulletred: Poems
:bulletred: Short stories and vignettes
And other various things
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2015

Hey! :rose:


I wanted to drop by personally to say thanks for joining TheWritePlace! I’m excited that people seem enthusiastic about it :giggle: If you wanna know more about our group check out Our Rules (there aren’t many and they’re all mostly common sense to me!) or just ask! If you fancy getting more involved we do have positions open which you can find out about here. For now I hope you enjoy the group and find it helpful. If you have ideas on how to make it more useful, suggestions, feedback, anything, just let us know - and when our chatroom #TheWriteRoom officially launches (soon) I hope to see you in there too :love:

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h e l l o . :wave:
t h a n k . y o u . f o r . t h e . k i n d . :+fav: . =)

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Hey thank you so much for the fav and comment! Hope you check some of my other paintings, I will be doing a lot moarr ^^ You have awesome works! Looking forward to seeing more from you! ^^
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Doodle-of-the-day Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2015  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
whaha die username :rofl:
je gallery is nice trouwens 
ah geen pinguin? dat is nou jammer XD
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Danicky Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
Happy birthday!!
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Danium Featured By Owner May 19, 2015
Lol your name! :lol:
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Thanks for the llama!!Llama Emoji 27 (Awesome) [V2] 
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Thank you for the fave! Its most appreciated!
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Thank you so much for the LLAMA!!
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Thank you for the Llama! ^-^
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Thanks for the fav!  :-)
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Thanks for the llama badge ^^
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Thank you so much for the :llama:! :3
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Appreciate the Llama!
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Thanks for the :llama:!!~ Bonnie Warfstache
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Thanks for the llama.Heart :happybounce: 
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thank you for faving my steampunk cupcake a while ago Dance!
may the Llama I offer in return remind you of my gratitude if you ever decide to +fav any of my other works in the future since I won't be spaming you with more 'thank you' notes Hug  but I'm always happy to answer comments or questions if you have any :D (Big Grin)
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I was looking at you're stamps and could not help but notice you had some Gorillaz stamps.. you rock! <3 Llama given!
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Thank you for adding my Mary Poppins cosplay! Hexentanz 
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Thanks for the llama! <3 :)
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Thank you for the llama :) Nice art **
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